So this is kind of Decemberists-y

Ok, here is are lyrics that I came up with; it sounds very Decemberists-y but I kinda like it. the soldier parts are kind of louder and quicker than the sweetheart parts which are soft and medium tempo. I don't like that I wrote a love song, I really want to figure out how to write a good surreal song. I like how this kind of tells a story though. I dunno, tell me what you think.

He sat in the trenches and heard the bombs sound/ he knew that his body would never be found/ his sweetheart fair with auburn hair/ oh he would never see her again

she kept his photograph in a locket fastened round her neck/ she wished and hoped this war would end and they would never part again

A deafening roar in his ear signaled his demise/ a moment before his spirit ascended, an image of her in his eyes

when the knock came at the door/ she knew just what it was/ fell to her knees clutching her heart imagining her love’s demise

he watched from above and saw her sad sorrow/ a tear in his eye/ but they both knew they would meet again/ true love never denies.